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James Maynard's avatar

“... to see the slow work / it’s business” is an inspired line break and to follow it with the “advertised”/“flies” rhyme is just fantastic.

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Kristen Lenea Ryberg's avatar

Thank you James, it was one of those rhymes that invited itself in :) I really appreciate your reading and comment.

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James Maynard's avatar

I love those rhymes best.

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nan's avatar

I love this Kristen except for the long line mentioning The Power of Positive Thinking. I think the line is too long and the book is too dated. BUT it’s a wonderful poem!

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Kristen Lenea Ryberg's avatar

Thank you Nan, I'll revisit that segment with that in mind. I appreciate you reading and commenting. Power of Positive Thinking is a stand in for spiritual bypassing....

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Rene' Johnson's avatar

❤️

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Arjan Tupan's avatar

Beautiful, Kristen!

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